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Writing Narrative vs Writing Dialogue
Writing Narrative vs Writing Dialogue
Copyright 2001, Michael LaRocca
http://free_reads.tripod.com
One of the nice things about being an author is that we can break any rule we want. (I just did.) Its part of our job description. Language changes through usage -- definitions, spelling, grammar -- and authors can help it do this. But on the other hand, we have to have some sort of agreement on the language or we wont be able to talk to each other.
When we as authors break a rule or two, its not because were ignorant. Its because we have reasons to break them. Thats one of the joys of writing.
Having said that, now Im going to explain some rules. There are two types of writing in your novel. There is your narrative and there is your dialogue. The rules for the two are not the same.
For example, comma use. In dialogue, its not so difficult. Put in a comma wherever your speaker pauses in his/her speaking. In narrative, you have to consult the style guides and hope that you and your editor, working as a team, can sort it all out.
NARRATIVE
A cop thriller like my Vigilante Justice has a simple set of rules for the narrative portion. Third-person, straightforward writing, light on adjectives and adverbs, easy to read and grammatically correct. Sentence fragments are acceptable if communication is achieved, and youll note that I use them often in this article. Why? Simply because its more effective that way.
To a degree the genre will help you identify whats appropriate. For a cop drama, write in the dry style of a journalist. For horror, a bit of hyperbole may be acceptable in the most dramatic sections. For romance (not my genre), you can probably use lots more adjectives (swollen, heaving, throbbing, etc.) than youd normally dare.
When I wrote Rising From The Ashes, the true story of Mom raising my brother and I alone, I tried to adopt a childlike voice early in the narrative. As the character of Michael the storyteller grew older, I abandoned that childlike quality. (An entire book of that would get old fast anyway.)
When I wrote An American Redneck In Hong Kong, the humorous sequel, I once again used first person narrative. But the narrative of Rising is first person only in that it uses I instead of Michael. It still follows all the rules of conventional narrative. In Redneck, I threw most of the rules out the window.
I used what one author referred to my as conversational tone to maximum effect in Redneck. This fellow author felt like he wasnt so much reading my book as just listening to me tell some stories over a few beers. Thats exactly what I wanted.
In Rising, while I was the first person character, I wasnt really the books focus. In Redneck, I am. Center stage, in the spotlight. Using more of a dialogue style in what should have been narrative allowed me to focus the readers attention on the first person to a greater degree than simply describing him ever could. You may love me or you may hate me, but youll know me and youll laugh at me.
If you want to see such a technique used to maximum effect, I recommend A Monk Swimming by Malachy McCourt. (I read it after writing Redneck, by the way.) Its about an actor who gets drunk and does very bad things to himself and his family, and its amazing just how much I laughed out loud reading about it. Doesnt sound like a funny subject, does it? Its not, and yet it is, thanks to his unconventional narrative style.
To tell you the truth, I dont even think McCourt wrote that book. I think he just said it all into a tape recorder and transcribed it later. It reads that much like a guy at the pub telling a tale. If he used the grammar checking function in MSWord, I bet it underlined every sentence. And, bright fellow that he is, he ignored them all and didnt change a word.
If youre going to use a more conversational tone in your narrative, dont think that means you just write something down and dont have to edit it. You still have to organize your thoughts, and that means rewriting. While your style may be unconventional, you have to make the ideas easy for the reader to follow.
(Im not entirely serious when I say McCourt just spoke into a tape recorder, and even if he did that doesnt mean the rest of us can get away with it.)
I originally wrote Redneck in chronological order. It worked for Rising, and it works for memoirs and novels in general, right? Well, in the case of Redneck, it was a disaster. Way too much remember what I said before about and so forth. So while it was accurate, and while it was conversational, it stunk. I changed everything to more of a theme-based approach and that did the trick. Still conversational and accurate, but organized. The ideas are as easy to follow as the writing style, and thats always the goal. Ease of reading.
In the case of narrative, you have the choice. If you want to spotlight the storyteller to maximum effect, you can go with first person and let the storytellers narrative and his dialogue read the same. If youd prefer to move the camera back a bit, make the narrative conventional in contrast to the dialogue. As a rule, this reader likes contrast, because he gets bored reading the same thing over and over again unless the style is really special. Or perhaps you can find a point somewhere between the two.
Every story has a way that it should be told for maximum effect. Maximum effect in the authors eyes, of course, as its a subjective thing. Keep it in mind as you write. Make the call, stick to it, change it if its not working. It might even be okay to be inconsistent, but only if you do so deliberately. Just keep stuff like ease of reading and maximum effect in mind and go be creative.
DIALOGUE
Have you ever read a book where the narrative and the dialogue read the same? I hope you havent. But as an editor Ive seen such things, and theyre very ugly.
Do you know why theyre so ugly? Because they remind the reader of the one thing an author does not want to remind the reader of. Namely, that every character on the page is a puppet under the authors control.
As readers, we put that thought aside so we can enjoy reading. Willing suspension of disbelief, to quote the phrase an English teacher used when describing the performance of Shakespeares plays. If the author ensures that the reader cant suspend disbelief, the book will not be read. Stilted dialogue is one of the quickest ways to make that happen.
Ive decided that writing dialogue is the hardest thing we do. Its certainly not the something we can go look up in a style manual like Strunk or Turabian.
What are the rules? Make it sound real. But with the corollary, not too real because people always say um and er and crap like that. Oh yeah. That explains everything! End of my article, right?
Nope. Im still writing it.
Ideally, the greatest of the great creators of dialogue will have every character speaking in a voice so distinctive that he/she need never identify the speaker. Okay, thats enough fiction. Back to reality. None of us are writing dialogue that well, are we?
People use a lot more contractions in speech than in writing. Theyre faster. More sentence fragments, too. People very
often use the wrong version of lie/lay or who instead of whom in speaking. (Personally, I never use whom in speaking or writing because I want to see that distinction scrapped, but thats another story.)
The dialogue portion of Vigilante Justice isnt difficult to describe. The hero is a self-destructive cop named Gary Drake. He is based on a real-life cop, my little brother. So his dialogue was easy because, in my mind, I always heard Gary speaking in Barrys voice.
For my other characters, I had to find some other voice. For example, the voice of Doctor Garrett Allison is, to me, that of Michael Jordan.
Thats right, people. When I write, I literally hear voices in my head.
As a beginning writer, and not a very good one, I read some advice somewhere saying you might want to cut photos out of magazines and use them when writing your physical description, in case you cant get a mental picture together of your characters. Ive used this technique, and with some modification Ive extended it to voices.
As an author, you should always play to your greatest strengths while working to improve your weaknesses. I know many authors who think visually, and I envy them that. Ive read some stuff that can make you feel youre skiing down a snow-covered mountain when its actually 85 degrees in your flat and youve never skied in your life.
One author told me that when he writes, he literally sees movies in his head, then just has to type them really fast because thats how theyre playing. Lucky him! My novels first come to me in snippets of dialogue. Every character has the same voice at that stage. (My voice, of course.)
Tight dialogue is one thing I enjoy when I read. Here are the characters at some sort of verbal showdown. I know them, I know their motives, I can read between the lines and know whats being left unsaid. I can just feel the tension in the air. Im not so much mentally picturing bulging veins and angry glares as I am just feeling the spoken words.
I also have an excellent memory of voices. I always have. Like a dog remembers scents or an artist colors, it seems, I can remember voices. If I hear an unfamiliar song on the radio but Ive ever heard that singer before, I can tell you who it is. I can tell you that the guy doing the voice of Gomez Addams in the original Addams Family cartoon is now doing one of the voices in the Tazmanian Devils cartoon series. I can spot an actor like Andreas Katsulas no matter what species of rubberized alien hes playing, because I recognize his voice, although really thats no great challenge in his case.
(For the record, if youve read The Chronicles Of A Madman, Ahriman looks and sounds like Andreas Katsulas. Clyde Windham is Dennis Franz. Wendy Himes is some girl who sold me some horse feed about ten years ago.)
But just hearing the voices (if youre able) isnt enough. The words themselves will be different depending on whos speaking them, even if theyre relaying the same information.
To get back to Vigilante Justice, Gary Drake doesnt use a lot of words. He almost never describes his own feelings, and if he does he always feels guilty about it. He speaks with a Southern drawl. He tends to use a single swear word, and that word is fuck.
Marjorie Brooks, on the other hand, mentions feelings and uses whichever swear word is the most accurate, except that she never says fuck. Doctor Allison doesnt use as many contractions as the rest of us do. These are things I kept in mind as I wrote their dialogue.
Who remembers Mr. Spock? His speech sounds like written language, very grammatical and correct, and thats deliberate. Hes a scientist, hes logical, and for him language is only one more tool to be used with as much precision as possible. That isnt just a different style of dialogue; it helps define his character.
In my The Chronicles Of A Madman, Ahriman used fewer contractions than the rest of us and he avoided sentence fragments. He probably even knew the difference between who and whom or lie and lay. Thats because hes intelligent, you see. It kinds of goes with the territory when one is evil incarnate.
During an edit I did of a sci-fi book, I saw where the author wasnt using enough contractions. I made many suggestions that he change the dialogue of the humans to use those contractions, except when military officers were giving orders, because order-giving officers tend to be more serious and thoughtful than folks just being regular folks.
I also suggested to this author that he change nothing about the stilted speech patterns of his aliens. English isnt their native language, you see, and one thing Ive noticed from living in China is that the locals dont use nearly as many contractions as I do. So I thought that added realism. Plus, the contrast should help keep the readers keep everybody straight even if they arent consciously aware of why.
I remember in one edit where I read some character saying, I am an historian. Oh, I hate that phrase. I hate anyone ever putting an in front of a word that begins with the consonant h. Correct or not -- and thats debatable -- its terribly pretentious and I dont like it. As I kept reading the book, I quickly learned that the character in question is terribly pretentious. Nobody else in the book was throwing an in front of h words. It was a deliberate contrast on the authors part, and it worked quite nicely.
CONCLUSION
I suppose the point of all this is, remember the difference between narrative and dialogue.
In the case of narrative, youre simply trying to describe what happens. There is a famous quote of some sort that says, Great writing is like a window pane. Stick to that maxim unless you feel you have a good reason not to. If youve got what it takes to make your writing style superior to the conventional, and if your story allows it, let that style be an asset of your writing. Otherwise, just stick to the rules until you master them.
In the case of dialogue, youre trying to write something that sounds like what the characters would actually say, but a bit more organized because real speech can be boring. Give every character his/her/its own voice.
Am I joking when I say its? Not entirely. The Chronicles Of A Madman contains a short story, written in first person from my dogs viewpoint. But then again, I would never call Daisy an it.
Theres a stylistic decision you can make in narrative, by the way. I always refer to animals as he or she. Some authors always use it.
In dialogue, you can let some characters always say he or she, and let others always say it, to contrast the feeling with the unfeeling. (My heroes never call an animal it.)
In the end, the goal is always the same. Make your writing as easy to read as you can. Keep that in mind, and always keep learning, and you wont go wrong.
About the Author
Michael is an American living in Hong Kong. He has been working as a full-time author for over two years and as an editor for over a year. He has 4 novels scheduled for publication. Hes proud of the fact that he rarely writes in the same genre twice. One of his novels is an EPPIE 2002 in the Thriller category. His website is at http://free_reads.tripod.com.
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